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교정강사 Arah(C)
등록일 2021-11-08
작성글 A. What was your favorite memory of your father?
When I was young, he was too busy working that I seldom had memories about my father.
One day, after I became an adult, I somehow felt that my father was too poor.
Cause we didn't have a lot of time with each other, I felt uncomfortable when I was with my father.
But, I did love him. I wanted to show my love to him in a direct way. So I tried to express it by hugging him or by contacting him without any reason. He changed little by little. Even if it is not that great memory, one day, when I entered his house, he hugged me tightly.
I could smell him. Also, I could feel his sweetness.
Although he passed away already, I cannot forget that feeling I had at that time.
교정내용

A. What was your favorite memory of your father?

When I was young, he was too busy working that I seldom had memories about my father. ​

One day, after I became an adult, I somehow felt that my father was too poor. ​

Cause we didn't have a lot of time with each other, I felt uncomfortable when I was with my father. ​

But, I did love him. ​

I wanted to show my love to him in a direct way. ​

So I tried to express it by hugging him or by contacting him without any reason. ​

He changed little by little. ​

Even if that memory isn't so great it is not that great memory, one day, when I entered his house, he hugged me tightly. 

=> Corrected : The sentence is corrected grammatically. 

I could smell him. ​

Also, I could feel his sweetness. ​

Although he passed away already, I cannot forget that feeling I had at that time.  ​​

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